2D Story line Critique.

I decided to critique my own, considering I was absent the day we had a critique.
My story is about a very frequent reacurring dream. I found it very amusing when I heard that the theme was crossing the line, as the theme of my dream is that me and my friend Josh always fight these zombies at night who cross this line that I drew in the sand on this beach in Corpus Cristi. I WISH that I had made that up. Before school started, we had taken a trip to Corpus with a couple of friends and went to a beach at night time. We played in the water and sand, and I thought that I saw a man walk from the ocean to the beach in swimming trunks. He was all strung out or drunk because he was falling all over him self like he was sick from being drunk or something. Then I totally thought of the scariest horror monster in my opinion: Zombies.
And whats scarier then them coming from the freaken ocean? Nothing. Soo ever since then there has been a beach zombie movie playing in my dreams pretty frequently since then. You can call bullshit, but I swear its true.  I think that the fact that I used a comic book style to portray my story added the line theme because about seventy percent of the panels, action sequences, and story incorperates lines.  The strongest princeples used in  the story are rhythm and movement. The way the story and visuals flow and such a nice rhythm that make it effortless to move through the panels at the rhythmatic pace that is brought on about by text placement and motion lines and angles. The value reallys brings out the sorta cheesey fast pace action of an old school zombie film, as well as the darkness that shows off the contrast in the always present over the top gore of old scary movies.
The thing that I find lacking in the story is more narrative aspects.  I plan on revising this by adding more text and length to  the comic.